The thing is, that's a really nondescriptive logline, and thus a bit boring. You don't want to call her "a woman", use some more descriptive term; and maybe after "high school crush", put a comma followed by "now a...." [descriptive term for the guy].
Every logline I've ever seen describes the main characters as either man or woman unless something else is crucial to the story like A businessman falls in love with a hooker he hires to be his date for the weekend. or A cop comes to LA to visit his estranged wife and her office building is taken over by terrorists.
It's just... what kind of woman is she? A lonely woman? A frustrated careerwoman? And... it doesn't even specify that the "high school crush" is a guy, and these days, that might just matter. =)
It wasn't a bad logline. It just didn't pop, for me.
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Date: 2010-04-01 04:50 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-04-02 07:31 am (UTC)A businessman falls in love with a hooker he hires to be his date for the weekend.
or
A cop comes to LA to visit his estranged wife and her office building is taken over by terrorists.
but I'll think about another way to put it.=)
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Date: 2010-04-02 08:04 am (UTC)It wasn't a bad logline. It just didn't pop, for me.
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Date: 2010-04-01 05:13 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-04-02 07:32 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-04-02 07:39 am (UTC)Either that or alien interference. Either way.
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Date: 2010-04-01 06:25 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-04-02 07:34 am (UTC)